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目前，就業(yè)形勢(shì)越來(lái)越嚴(yán)峻。就業(yè)壓力不僅是大學(xué)生無(wú)法回避的現(xiàn)實(shí)，也是高中生需要考慮的問(wèn)題。就此你校編輯部開(kāi)展了一次題為“就業(yè)危機(jī)對(duì)高中生的啟示”的英語(yǔ)征文活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提示，寫(xiě)一篇征文，闡明你的觀點(diǎn)。

1. 努力學(xué)習(xí)，拓寬知識(shí)面； 2. 發(fā)展才能，提高個(gè)人素質(zhì)；3. 加強(qiáng)合作精神，培養(yǎng)團(tuán)隊(duì)意識(shí)；

4. 了解社會(huì)需求，做好人生規(guī)劃；  5. 你的觀點(diǎn)……

注意：1. 詞數(shù)120左右  2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫 3. 文章開(kāi)頭已寫(xiě)好，不計(jì)人總詞數(shù)。

What We High School Students Learn from the Job-hunting Crisis

As we all know, the employment situation is getting more and more serious now. Being high school students, what can we learn from it?

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Answer 1

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What We High School Students Learn from the Job-hunting Crisis

As we all know, the employment situation is getting more and more serious now. Being high school students, what can we learn from it?

To start with, we should put all our heart into study to broaden our knowledge in various fields. It is required that we should develop our abilities in many aspects and improve our personal qualities to achieve our goals in this highly competitive society. Additionally, learning to cooperate with others is another thing we must do, for the sense of teamwork contributes to success more quickly. Last but not least, as young generation in China, we’d better set our long-term plans to meet what society demands.

At present, I think only by working hard can our ability be fully developed.I’ll spare no effort to study hard to accomplish my goal.

【解析】

試題分析：本文是一篇提綱作文。寫(xiě)作時(shí)首先要仔細(xì)審題，確定人稱(chēng)，時(shí)態(tài)，文體。內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)要全面，上下段要使用連接詞做到連貫。我們?cè)趯?xiě)作中應(yīng)當(dāng)遵循語(yǔ)言表述的經(jīng)濟(jì)原則，即用盡可能少的形式表達(dá)盡可能多的語(yǔ)義內(nèi)容，力求簡(jiǎn)潔精練。根據(jù)提綱的提示，寫(xiě)出所列要點(diǎn)，要全面。我們?cè)谟迷~上應(yīng)該仔細(xì)揣摩，準(zhǔn)確清晰地表達(dá)我們的思想，剔除冗詞贅語(yǔ)，使文章言簡(jiǎn)意賅。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，比如：As we all know, the employment situation is getting more and more serious now，put all our heart into stuty to broaden our knowledge in various fields. improve our personal qualities，achieve our goals等。還運(yùn)用了主語(yǔ)從句It is required that we should develop our abilities in many aspects and improve our personal qualities to achieve our goals in this highly competitive society等。并注意了句子的銜接如：To start with, Additionally, Last but not least等。

考點(diǎn)：提綱作文。