Question

根據(jù)下面提示，以“Believe in Yourself and You Will Succeed”為題寫(xiě)一篇短文，詞數(shù)： 100左右。
提示：
1. 學(xué)習(xí)中遇到的困難；
2. 如何克服困難的；
3. 從中學(xué)到了什么。
Believe in Yourself and You Will Succeed
　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　　　　
                                                                                 
                                                                                          

Answer 1

Everyone will face some difficulties in his or her life or study. What should we do when we are in trouble? I think the most important is that we should believe in ourselves. I still remember that when I began learning English, I found it difficult to learn it well. The words were difficult to remember, and the grammars were not easy to understand. Besides, the worst thing was that I was afraid of speaking English aloud, especially in public. I was always afraid of making mistakes. The result is that I couldn’t learn English well. Then, my teacher and friends encouraged me and told me that I must believe in myself and needn’t be afraid of making mistakes.  So, I tried my best to learn English, especially practice speaking English. I still make some mistakes now but I don’t think it is a big problem. Now, my English is being improved day by day. From this experience I know that if we believe in ourselves, we will succeed.

試題分析：這是篇命題作文，題目給出了寫(xiě)作的標(biāo)題以及內(nèi)容提示，寫(xiě)作中要緊扣提示，注意要點(diǎn)的完整性。在對(duì)事件進(jìn)行描述時(shí)，注意時(shí)態(tài)的準(zhǔn)確使用和主謂一致。可適當(dāng)?shù)氖褂靡恍┻B詞來(lái)增加文章的邏輯性。另外可適當(dāng)使用一些復(fù)合句，如學(xué)過(guò)的定語(yǔ)從句，賓語(yǔ)從句等。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇作文結(jié)構(gòu)完整，表述準(zhǔn)確流利。文中出現(xiàn)了一些復(fù)合句，使表述更緊湊，如：I still remember that when I began learning English, I found it difficult to learn it well.我仍然記得當(dāng)我剛開(kāi)始學(xué)英語(yǔ)時(shí)，我發(fā)現(xiàn)很難學(xué)好。That引導(dǎo)了賓語(yǔ)從句。Besides, the worst thing was that I was afraid of speaking English aloud, especially in public.另外，最糟糕的事情是害怕大聲說(shuō)英語(yǔ)，尤其是在公共場(chǎng)合。句中that引導(dǎo)了表語(yǔ)從句。另外，文中使用了一些連詞，如and， besides, so 等等。