Question

假設(shè)你叫Mark，你過了一個非常開心和健康的暑假，你去看望了你的外公外婆，和爸爸一起去爬山，常常幫助媽媽干家務(wù)，幾乎沒有上網(wǎng)打游戲，有時候和家人一起看電視，比如中國達(dá)人秀“China’s Got Talent”，你還經(jīng)常和你的朋友鍛煉身體......字?jǐn)?shù):(70詞左右)。
參考詞匯：visit，go to mountains, hardly ever, exercise...

Answer 1

I am Li Hua. I had a very happy and healthy summer vacation. At the beginning of the vacation, I visited my grandparents who live in the countryside. I went to mountains with my father for several times. It helped me to be stronger and healthier. At home, I often helped mother do housework. I never played computer games. I spent time watching TV with my family. We all like the show “China’s Got Talent”, which is very popular in China. I also exercised with my friends sometimes.

試題分析：這是篇給材料作文。材料中已經(jīng)包括了寫作的要點，在寫作時不要遺漏。在陳述的時候注意句子的完整性和正確性，句子之間要邏輯清晰。寫作時，注意要用第一人稱，用一般過去式。所以尤其要注意動詞的形式。
【亮點分析】
這篇文章緊扣材料，要點齊全，表述通順流暢。文中用到了很多短語，例如：At the beginning of the vacation,在假期開始；go to mountains爬山；for several times幾次；help sb. do sth.幫助某人做…..;等等。文章里也有些復(fù)雜的長句，例如：At the beginning of the vacation, I visited my grandparents who live in the countryside.在假期的開始，我去看忘了爺爺奶奶，他們住在鄉(xiāng)下。Who引導(dǎo)了一個定語從句。We all like the show “China’s Got Talent”, which is very popular in China.我們都喜歡中國達(dá)人秀這個節(jié)目，它在中國很流行。Which引導(dǎo)了非限制性定語從句。