Question

6．每個(gè)人都有自己的業(yè)余愛好，有益的業(yè)余愛好不但可以陶冶我們的情操，增強(qiáng)我們的體質(zhì)，放松我們的身心，還能讓我們?cè)趯W(xué)習(xí)或工作時(shí)精力更旺盛，效率更高．作為一名中學(xué)生，你在忙碌的學(xué)習(xí)之余做些什么？請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示寫一篇短文，談一談你的業(yè)余愛好．
1．寫作要點(diǎn)提示：
（1）你的業(yè)余愛好是什么；
（2）重點(diǎn)講述你從事業(yè)余愛好的一次經(jīng)歷；
（3）你的業(yè)余愛好對(duì)你學(xué)習(xí)、生活的影響．
2．寫作要求：
短文的內(nèi)容應(yīng)包含所提示的要點(diǎn)，語言要流暢，可圍繞提示要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)增加情節(jié)，使短文的意思連貫；短文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的姓名、校名及地名；短文的詞數(shù)在90 個(gè)左右．

Answer 1

分析 【高分句型一】
And then I took a course so that I could get close to it and see it well后來，我參加了美術(shù)課程，這樣我就可以與繪畫的距離更近，也可以更好地了解它
so that引導(dǎo)的目的狀語從句．
【高分句型二】
Since that time，I have felt it like a nice person deep in my heart who can talk with me with true words and make me happy with life自從那次，我感覺美術(shù)就像是一個(gè)我心里的那個(gè)和我真心交談，讓我開心的人．
who作為關(guān)系詞的定語從句，修飾前面的person．

解答 My Hobby
I like drawing．It does bring me happiness．（愛好是什么）
As a kid，I was keen on those lines and curves drawn on paper made into animals and scenes．It really could show beauty to people and express my feelings．And then I took a course so that I could get close to it and see it well．【高分句型一】But at that time，I just did it for fun．
Years went by，I got into a long period of time filled with pressure in study．And I found it so good a way to relax．It did not any longer play an unimportant role in my living，but bacame my friend．（一次經(jīng)歷）
Since that time，I have felt it like a nice person deep in my heart who can talk with me with true words and make me happy with life．【高分句型二】This is my hobby，not just a hobby，but also a true friend．（對(duì)你學(xué)習(xí)、生活的影響）

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（1）應(yīng)抓住文章中心，圍繞主題，根據(jù)提示列出要寫的信息要點(diǎn)．
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