Question

4．"南充是我家，文明靠大家！"作為中學生，我們應積極參與文明城市（civilized city）的建設．請根據以下提示，寫一篇80詞左右的短文（開頭已給出，不計入總詞數）．
1．尊敬老師，對人禮貌；
2．幫助他人，友善待人；
3．遵守交規(guī)，過馬路走斑馬線，不闖紅燈；
4．保護環(huán)境，不亂扔垃圾，不亂踩草地．
【參考詞匯】
respect（尊敬）；be polite to；obey（遵守）；traffic rules；zebra crossing（斑馬線）
【要求】
1．短文應包括所提供的信息及要點，可適當發(fā)揮；
2．語句通順，意思連貫；
3．文中不可出現真實的人名、地名和校名；
4．請把文章寫在答題卡相應位置的橫線上．
Nanchong is now making its effort to become a civilized city．As students，what should we do？
                                           

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一
We should also help those who are in need and be friendly to the people around us我們也應該幫助那些有需要的人，對我們周圍的人友好．這是who引導的定語從句，修飾先行詞 those．
高分句型二
When we cross the street，we should walk on the zebra crossing當我們過馬路時，我們應該走斑馬線．這是when引導的時間狀語從句，當…時候．

解答 Nanchong is now making its effort to become a civilized city．As students，what should we do？【開篇點明主題】
We must respect our teachers and be polite to others．We should also help those who are in need and be friendly to the people around us【高分句型一，注意定語從句的使用】．Besides，we must obey the traffic rules．When we cross the street，we should walk on the zebra crossing【高分句型二，注意時間狀語從句的使用】．And we mustn't go across the street when the traffic lights are red．What's more，we should protect our environment．For example，we mustn't step on the grass and climb the trees．Litter mustn't be thrown everywhere．【正文部分詳細介紹應該怎么做】
Nanchong is our hometown．Let's try our best to make it a civilized city．【結尾緊扣主題】

點評 本篇寫作需注意要求中所提供的要點，不可遺漏．需在平時積累相關的詞匯，多閱讀此類題材，將詞匯歸類整理；動筆前可以按照材料內容列出簡單提綱，寫出關鍵單詞．寫作中注意語義通順，符合邏輯關系．上下文之間可以適當使用連接詞．如but，so，then等．